Our picture book Friday host is BUSY!
This is the fourth year that author Susanna Leonard Hill has offered writers the opportunity to win fantastic prizes in a Halloween story contest. It's called the Halloweensie contest because the story has to be for "wee ones." I wrote my story for the elementary set. And in addition to being for children, the story itself has to be a wee 100 words or less.
Susanna ups the ante by requiring writers to use three specific words somewhere in the story. Broomstick, creak and pumpkin (or some variant of these words) are this year's special words.
I enjoy the challenge of writing to Susanna's guidelines, and the fun of thinking up crazy scenarios to use her required three words. This year I came up with several stories and had to decide which to post!
I've never written in rhyme before and so I hope you enjoy (and think that kids would enjoy!) my 93-word story, "That Magical October Sky."
That Magical October Sky
Momma Mouse saw harvest moon.
|Public domain image from pixabay (not my house!)|
Little Mouse saw pie.
Momma Mouse said, “Come in soon!”
Little Mouse said, “Why?”
“It’s time for bed,” Momma warned.
“Back soon!” said Little Mouse,
Running toward the broomstick
He’d left beside the house.
The broomstick creaked and sputtered.
Little Mouse took flight,
Headed for a pumpkin treat
Before he said goodnight.
Past the trees,
Through the stars,
Little Mouse rose high,
Aiming for the scrumptious shining pumpkin in the sky.
The voyage was untested.
The landing pad untried.
Dropping to the orange orb,
Little Mouse was pie-d.
Thanks for stopping by to read. Comments are appreciated. (maybe editorial suggestions?!)
Writers who are entering the contest have linked their stories to Susanna's blog. Head over if you'd like to read more. Last year there were more than seventy entries! I'm betting there will be a lot of great ones again this year.
Pretty good for someone who hasn't written in rhyme before!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Janet! I guess I should say I have written in rhyme in the privacy of my own home, but I've never let anyone else read it before. :)Delete
I never sPied that ending coming! :)ReplyDelete
LOL. Wordplay is fun!Delete
This is adorable, Wendy! Beautifully written and so fun. Great job!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Cheryl! I'm easily scared (really!) so I went for fun at Halloween.Delete
Love the dialogue between the mother and her Little One, but also his/her spunk! Well done!ReplyDelete
I think he will bring back and share some pie with Momma. If he recuperates from the crash/splash landing, lol.Delete
Very fun! The ending is soooo cute! Love it!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Penny. Coming from a rhyming pro that means a lot to me. :))Delete
You had me after those first two lines. So cute!ReplyDelete
Pumpkin Pie Surprise! So cute, Wendy!ReplyDelete
I love to surprise my crit partners once in a while, lol.Delete
Wonderfully written. Love that ending. ADORABLE!! The rhyme flows from one line to the next.ReplyDelete
Thanks, Robyn. I know I varied the meter here and there, hoping it made it less singsong but it was all based on hope.Delete
Oh that's fun. Nice job and good luck.ReplyDelete
Thanks, Johnell! It was fun to write. :)Delete
Mmmm, mouse pie! Great job, Wendy!ReplyDelete
Ooh! I like that for a title. Mouse Pie. Wish I had thought of it.Delete
Very clever. I love your opening. And I also love pie.ReplyDelete
I love pie too! I've been practicing for Thanksgiving.Delete
Loved your story. You had me with never tried rhyme before. I would never have guessed. You did perfect. :)ReplyDelete
I've only had one other story "tell me" that it wanted to be in rhyme before-and that hasn't made it out of the drawer. It was fun to work in this style again.Delete
Fun, whimsical, and tasty too...ReplyDelete
I haven't had pumpkin pie yet this fall. I think my subconscious telling me something, lol.Delete
So much fun. That Little Mouse was brave!ReplyDelete
Love and licks,
Food is the great motivator, right cupcake!Delete
Wendy - I love the wordplay in those first two stanzas. And what a cute idea - of course the moon looks like pie! Now that you've started rhyming though, you may find it hard to stop. :)ReplyDelete
I rhyme around the house all the time. My kids would call them groaners. But this public thing is harder.Delete
Wendy! So delightful! You've never written in rhyme before? I don't believe it! Little Mouse is so cute in his determination, and I love that his broomstick "sputtered" :) And now you've got me thinking about pie. Great idea :) Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun! :)ReplyDelete
I believed those folks who said "don't write in rhyme!", Susanna. Still don't know if I'm brave enough. (I did write a haiku once for a blog! No rhyming though)Delete
oh the adventures a broom could bring, little mouse surely had a big one.ReplyDelete
It's fun to dream those big adventures. Off to find my broom . . .Delete
This is wonderful, Wendy! I love the rhythm and rhymes, and the unexpected ending - great work! Maybe you should share your rhymes with the world more often!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Carrie! It's so hard to un-hear that voice that says "Don't do that!"Delete
Totally charmed and sold at the last line , what a fun pumpkin pie way to end the story !!! And yeah that mouse is tooooo cutteeeeee!!! I just remembered all those times when mama called and we said just be back to have our own adventures. Thanks for sharing! !ReplyDelete
I like mice, too! Of course, I've never had one in my house. Thanks for stopping by, Rupali.Delete
That is so creative Wendy, nice job! Food is a splendid subject.ReplyDelete
I think about food a lot. Go, chocolate!Delete
Did NOT see that coming. (Don't think Little Mouse did, either!) :-)ReplyDelete
Ha! You're right about that, Cathy.Delete
Hi Wendy, I love this contest and the opportunity it provides to try out things like rhyme. Your little mouse is as sweet and as daring as they come. Great entry.ReplyDelete
I agree, Teresa! I don't think I would have been brave enough to start a rhyming picture book manuscript. But maybe my mouse will give me courage.Delete
Great rhyming story! The ending is funny!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Rachel! Glad you enjoyed it.Delete
Very original and fab rhyme! Love little mouse.ReplyDelete
Thanks, Kathy! Shooting for the moon. :)Delete
Love the image of mousie on a broom--hope he recovers from his rough landing!ReplyDelete
I'm hoping mice have good grip. Mamma mouse is too.Delete
Very well written and full of imagery and action. Just like a kid, nothing is impossible. Did not see that ending coming.ReplyDelete
Thanks, Pat! I like thinking nothing is impossible.Delete
Fun AND funny. Very visual too.ReplyDelete
Oh pie in the sky! I love it! And I love that your mouse is NOT from your house - LOLReplyDelete
I like the idea of a mouse-witch, and that he got what he wanted in the end (pie). Great job :)ReplyDelete
What a fun adventure for a little mouse! Cute, Wendy. :)ReplyDelete
Fun entry, and now I want pumpkin pie. :)ReplyDelete
That was laugh out loud fun. Such a cute story, and wonderful rhyme, Wendy!ReplyDelete
Cute! It's funny how more than one writer used the pumpkin in the moon for this contest. I LOVE the idea.ReplyDelete
Loved the ending Wendy.ReplyDelete
I like your story! :DReplyDelete